Friday, February 26, 2010

Carry The Weight Part 2 (Brotin Tale #5)

Okay people, you know the Brotin drill. Go read Brian Miller's part first before you read this, otherwise you will be totally lost. It was his turn to start us off this time!


I ask Tommy why he needs a happy machine. After years of dealing with children, I have developed a keen sense of observation when it comes to spotting abuse or neglect.

“I dunno,” he answers me, staring down at the floor in a valiant effort not to make eye contact.

I don’t push him too hard, Too much pressure and he will never open up to me.

“Okay Tommy, you can tell me when you feel like it,” I say to him, giving the boy a gentle rub on his shoulder, trying to assure him that I can be trusted.

He follows me around most of the afternoon, not saying much, but seemingly enjoying my company. Even when the science fair is well underway, the sheepish boy refuses to leave my side.

“Are your parents coming to the show?”

“Mom might, but Dad will never come,”

“Why not?” I ask him, trying not to sound like I am prying too much.

“Because Mommy and Daddy don’t do anything together without yelling. That’s why I made them another Happy Box.”

“You mean Happy Machine?” I ask him, curious as to why he changed his terminology when referring to his project.

“Well, mine is a Happiness Machine, and the other one is a Happiness Box. I figured that since I made my machine in a box that I could just call them both Happiness Boxes. Mine is bigger than the other one. I added some lights and stuff. I just hope that it works as good.”

I was going to delve deeper into the second happy box, but Tommy’s mother made her presence known at her son’s exhibit.

“Good afternoon, Mrs. Douglas,” I say, greeting her in a friendly tone of voice. “Did you and Tommy’s dad help him with his project? It is a very creative and wonderful idea.”

She just stares at the box full of lights and gadgets as if she has never seen it before.

“It’s another Happy Box, Mom. Now we have two happy boxes!”

It is at this point that I know that she has never seen his project before. A look of anger fills her face.

“Tommy, you grab that happy thing of yours. We are going, NOW!”

“Mrs. Douglas, he obviously put a lot of time and effort into his happy machine, how about giving him a chance to use it and bring a few smiles to his own face?”

She peers at me with a spiteful glance, picks up Tommy’s happy box, and grabs her son by the arm.

“Raise you own God Damned kid the way you like. Leave my kid to me!” She snaps, and then leads him away.

“Bye Mr. Miller,” Tommy says as he flashes me a look of helplessness.

At that, his mother picks up the pace and they disappear down the hall.

the second inkling of concern pulls at my conscience, he sees it on my face, his hand waves goodbye with troubled thought, bringing back the weight that I felt yesterday while I was at the window...

*****

Tommy and his mother arrive at their home. She leads her son inside, puts the project on the coffee table and then proceeds to slap him across the face.

“You little Bastard, don’t you ever tell people that we need a happy box!”

Tommy begins to cry and runs to his bedroom, slamming the door.

“Wait until your Dad hears what you made, he’s gonna kill you,” she yells out, in the direction of his bedroom.

Tommy shudders.

Later, Tommy’s dad enters the room brandishing a belt. He violently flips his son over and lashes at his lower back and buttocks. He has a crazy look about him as he grinds his teeth and growls out a word with every single sickening strike.

“DON’T (slap) EVER(slap) TALK(slap) ABOUT(slap) US(slap) OUTSIDE(slap) OF(slap) THIS (slap) HOUSE(slap) AGAIN!”

Tommys cries are ear piercing, as his father exits the room and slams the door. He heaves and sobs for over an hour, rubbing his back where the welts continued to grow larger. Tommy thinks about his happy machine in the box that he left on the coffee table. He hopes that maybe his parents will use his invention tonight.

He lays in bed for a long time, watching the light that comes in from under his bedroom door. He knows that when the light dims, that he will be able to peek out and see if they are going to try his invention. Finally, after what seems like an eternity, the light grows dim and Tommy climbs from his bed. He cracks open his bedroom door and gazes into the family room. He sees that the box containing his happy machine is no longer on the table. It had been replaced by the other happy box, the big wooden one that he has seen them use many times. His mom holds a spoon over an open flame, as his dad grabs a big needle and a large rubber band from the box. Tommy watches as his dad twists the rubber band tight and jabs the needle into his arm. He has seen his parents do this many times, often referring to the box as their “Happy Box”.

Tommy watches for a while as his mom injects herself, and then for a period of time his parents both look so peaceful and quiet. It seems that his little happiness machine was no match for theirs. He can not wait until he is old enough to try their happy box. He is tired of the beatings. He knows now that he cannot talk to Mr. Miller anymore about his home life. It hurts too much!

******

I drive home, knowing that I will have to notify Social Services about Tommy Douglas. I know that he is in trouble. I do not know what kind of trouble it is, but I feel pretty sure that I can save him. Tomorrow morning will bring new hope for him. Knowing that I am going to take action eases my mind. I get ready for bed and just stand in the bathroom staring in the mirror.

I have eased the concern that pulls at my conscience, I can see it on my own face, my finger flips the light switch with a peaceful thought, leaving behind the weight that I felt while I was at the window...




62 comments:

Tom said...

wow...you always go the direction least suspected. Gritty stuff, otie.

Brian Miller said...

dang...did not see this one coming...i like it. its real. and you put my name in there...lol. this could almost not be fiction now...

Sweet-Britches said...

You are a.w.e.s.o.m.e.

*HUGS*

The Retired One said...

Wonderful twist, and so, so, real....I am sure children experience this more often than we like to think of it happening..........

Titanium said...

This one actually made me cry. If only all the Tommys had someone to advocate for them before it is too late.

Words are tough to come by, for this one.

subby said...

DAMN! Replace the drugs with booze...and..oh hell, nevermind...bad flashback! Really bad!

Cabo said...

DAMN... Brotin needs their own dedicated blog, bro! Awesome.

Bernie said...

Well done, Brian will be proud, I did hate the fact that this child was beaten so badly, reality tells me it happens and it is so sad.
.........:-) Hugs

Baino said...

It was a nice twist there boys.

Mama Zen said...

Awesome, Otin! Totally unexpected.

Little Ms Blogger said...

I'm impressed. No killing of anyone, but pretty close.

Seriously, I was thinking the other larger happy box was going to contain the body parts of the husband. I thought the wife killed him. Never imagined the other happy box to include drugs.

Nice spin.

Larry said...

you captured real true life here and did it well I only hope that some day this kind of problem don'thappen anymore but then again find it hard to believe that it ever will . You and Brian did a gret job on this i applaud you both.
Larry

Ocean Girl said...

You made it real. Even Miller did not expect it.

Ronda Laveen said...

I was so hoping his Happy box was btter than theirs but great Brotin, as usual.

jinksy said...

A sad reflection of life today...but masterful writing.

Secretia said...

Heroin is the devil. It has killed people I know and it's available to little kids a two dollars a hit.
God's biggest fuck-up!

Secretia

lettuce said...

first time I've made it over here from Brians for part 2.
Almost wish i hadn't just because its so grim - but nicely done!

the walking man said...

The normal change in narrative between your and Brian's voice worked quite well. He took the imagination soaring and you brought it to the earth, not easily or gently, but certainly a reality to easily ignored. This is well worth the time it took to read.

Well done guys.

Susan said...

Wow...wow...wow..wow. You completely rock as a writer. I had no idea where it was going and when it got there, well to quote an old friend, "and boom goes the dynamite". That was explosive Otin. Just incredible. I'm going to free flow something out at midnight tonight. I hope you'll pop in to check it out. Oh yeah, today is Song Saturday. I've got three going up. All love songs. You might find something to play for Blue Violet *smiles*

Dave King said...

Great stuff! The denouement certainly didn't disappoint!

Skye said...

Wow Otin, that one strikes at the heart of so many peoples problems! Great job :)

Kim A. said...

A happier ending then I expected...I love happier endings. Having a kid who uses, I am so grateful to his teacher's who cared enough to just let me know they saw in him what I did..addiction sucks...but I believe in happy endings.

namaste

Jess Mistress of Mischief said...

visceral! tears!

Jill said...

This one is TOO REAL guys...just too real...breaks my heart. In my world, (social work) the teacher does NOTHING and the kid is DEAD the next day from the next beating.

We "ease" our consciences with such lame thoughts of heroism and DO NOTHING...absolutely nothing.

Excellent story.

TechnoBabe said...

Ah yes the belt. Such memories. The best part of this story is that the teacher is going to notify someone.
You and Brian are doing a great job sharing the writing. This is really good if too real.

shakira choong said...

I love the story but I really do not like the darkness, so sad that he thought he needed the Happy box when he grow up . So sad.

Hey, this is abuse right? So sad.

hugs
shakira

Magpie said...

It's amazing how you two can pick up a train of thought from each other and head different ways.
Great job!

Quirkyloon said...

Another great twist, giving "happy boxes" a new meaning.

Wait, I'm not sure which meanings they really ever had. *grin*

You really get us digging deep in the emotions with your story telling words.

Nicely done!

Barbara said...

Frightening.

CatLadyLarew said...

Those of us who work with kids know that there's a lot of misery out there that most people can't begin to fathom. Hope that kid somehow manages to break the happiness box cycle.

buffalodick said...

I'm an old fashioned sort...watched too many Westerns when I was a kid..I don't believe in striking women or children- and never have. I never allowed anyone else to do it, when I was around. I have fought for the kids getting picked on when I was in school..I could tell, even at a young age, people who weren't brought up the way I was- violence is a chain that can be broken..

Brian Miller said...

buffalo...i agree. its a cowards way...sad and riles me up a bit...

Mighty M said...

Great story, boys!!

Cop Mama said...

Even more intriguing...I saw the abuse coming, but not the box. This was painful to read yet I've seen this in real life. I think we all want to see Tommy rescued now...or fight back???

blueviolet said...

As troubling as it is to see him having to live that kind of life, it's nice that you left us with hope for his future at the end.

Excellent as always, honey. I love you!!!!

Jaime said...

you're into the disturbing stories these days, huh? nicely done.

idgtm said...

Ok honestly, this was waaaay toooo loooong to read, but stopping by to say hi none the less.

Enjoy the remainder of your weekend.

otin said...

I love you too, blueviolet!

Yep there was a glimmer of hope in a pretty terrible situation.

(You may be able to wear shorts when you get here, it is starting to warm up!)

Raven said...

I love where you took this story, Otin, it's a great twist.

Have a wonderful weekend.

Pseudonymous High School Teacher said...

Hey Otin. This one was hard for me. I've worked with high risk teens and your story hit close to home.

tattytiara said...

Well I'm not surprised...

...that you managed to completely surprise me with the direction you took this in. You always do!

Smart Mouth Broad said...

The talent you two bring to this project is incredible. The story is heart-breaking. Where's my happy ending? :-)

Lisa said...

Sad thing, Otin, there many of my students that I worry about because I see the desire to be around me. They eat up my smiles, the hugs, the jokes, even when I put down the law and hold them accountable...I think it is because they get nothing at home. It breaks my heart. I see young men and women turn to a variety of happy boxes to endure the pain and lonliness of their lives...sometimes it drugs, gangs, unwanted pregnancies, becoming the class clown or bully..... It breaks my heart.

Sad story....but it's unfortunately based on truth.

Corrie Howe said...

I agree, you took it in an unexpected direction and I loved how you used Mr Miller in it. I also agree, now it sounds more real to his life.

Tracey said...

Wow! I'm totally impressed. You both did a wonderful job on this story. Thank you!

GEM

Tracie said...

This is a more serious one. Great story. Lots of food for thought.

Kaylen said...

So sad....it hurts my heart to know that there are so many kids out there who really ARE Tommy. And they don't always have a Mr. Miller looking out for them...

Tgoette said...

Love it! It's like a Twilight Zone type of twist at the end. Very well done both of you!

Unknown Mami said...

This makes my heart ache and my throat tighten. Good luck, Tommy.

♥ Braja said...

omg that was terrible....so sad.....ouch.....i mean, not terrible on your part :) So sad....

Eternally Distracted said...

Amazing part 2... sadly all too true for some kids. Let's hope that they all have a Mr Miller.

ladyfi said...

Oh wow! A terrific ending - and oh, so very sad.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

You didn't take it in the direction I thought you might take it - but the direction you took it in? Genius! Well done as usual, Otie! :)

Kathy's Klothesline said...

This is a softer, gentler Otin. Otin in love. Left us with hope for the boys future! I liked the Otin before, but I REALLY like this Otin! I would have thought you would have made it a bomb to wipe out the bad parents! I like this better!

Shelle said...

wow...awesome reality story...

only a movie said...

Dude... so sad. Well done, both of you.

rxBambi said...

This was incredible otie. Really. I love the direction you took it, and I really want to beat that mother. Very nicely done.

AJ said...

Powerful! First time visitor to you and Brian Miller's. Great writing!

järnebrand said...

This one made me cry. There are a lot of kids out there lving lives like this. They need us to be adults who take action. Some people shouldn't be allowed to become parents, I think. Poor kid. Makes me wanna run home and hug my own kids. Great post, you and Brian. /Jo.

Nessa said...

Very well played. You surprised with a new direction and you really highlighted to futility of chasing happiness.

RnPB: Ch 013 - Clean Up

AmyLK said...

Oh my! How heartbreaking. And it happens so often these days. Wonderful story!

Pat said...

Wow - I was not expecting this tale to turn this way. Very interesting read. It sure is food for thought and makes you think twice about what kids hear and see at home and their interpretation of it.

I love your "Brotin" tales!