Friday, April 30, 2010

The Final Cut

Story deleted due to copyright concerns

35 comments:

Brian Miller said...

tight otin...i like the added element of the friend he is now doing the autopsy on...it humanizes the story...nicely done...

Lisa said...

Otin. It kind of gave me the feeling I have when I watch ghost stories on tv!

So, you day love is gonna smack me in the face one day, huh? Can you give me an ETA on this day of love's smackdown? I have been divorced ten years and honestly there has been nothing close to a smack, let alone a pinch or even a brush of the skin....

Sounds like you had the shit beat out of you by cupid and you kind like it! :) Hugs, Lisa

TechnoBabe said...

Brandon ended up in the right job for him that's for sure.

blueviolet said...

Why do all boys think that kind of thing is going to make girls like them? Boys are so dumb! Well, except for you. You're wonderful and I love you!!!

otin said...

Blueviolet- I promise love, cherish, obey, and never throw frog guts at you! :)

I love you, too, Sweetheart!

Everyday Goddess said...

Wow, nicely, creepily, done!

Tom said...

ha, i knew when you started it out so creepy there'd be a neat twist. Cool.

Unknown Mami said...

I like it, I like it. Well done.

ReformingGeek said...

I was afraid when I first started reading this one but you fooled me. What a great story, Otin!

Christina said...

What a story Otin! I was totally starting to think Brandon was some sort of weirdo maniac!

The Retired One said...

So THAT is why frogs go "rippit, rippit".
Sorry.
That was sick.
But I had to do it. ha

That was a real interesting piece...loved the suspense of where you were going to take it.

Mighty M said...

Great story - I totally expected it to go a different, more morbid way (if it isn't morbid enough already!).

:)

AngelMay said...

Ha! I had this one nailed - well, except for the frog part. That was a great twist. Good story, Otin!

gayle said...

I am so glad for a sort of happy ending!!

Bridgette said...

That was a cool story! Once again, I thought I knew exactly where this story was going....wrong! Keep up the good work! :)

Nancy said...

Good twist. But I thought he would be a surgeon at the end...

Ronda Laveen said...

What a nice, tight, concise story. Great misdirection with the beginning.

Eternally Distracted said...

I didn't expect that. I thought it would be another gruesome 'can't sleep at night coz I have nightmares' Otin tale... but now I feel sorry for him... and her of course :0)

Lana@The Kids Did WHAT?! said...

Good one! It didn't head in the direction I thought it was going. Which makes it awesome!!

the walking man said...

It read very well Micheal.

Prayer Girl said...

Amazing! You took me from thinking I was reading about a serial killer (and wondering about 'you') and two very evil people to discovering none of that was true. Very well done. You write so well. I loved it.

PG

CatLadyLarew said...

I fell for the whole serial killer thing, too... which was your evil plan all along! Well done, Otin!

JenJen said...

You know I read this twice. The first time quickly because I was scared.
The second time was for the entertainment value.

I seem to do that alot over here! :)

you are one great story teller, my friend.

buffalodick said...

The word ironic comes to mind..

Wendy said...

AWESOME!
(Since you went '80s, i thought i would too.)

Loved it, Otin!
Once again.
=-)

Respectfully Yours said...

Great story, loved it. You had me thinking "serial killer" all the way.

Smart Mouth Broad said...

Loved it! Loved it! Loved it!

Katherine said...

Phew..I'm glad he wasn't some kind of maniac jack the ripper type dude! It does take a very special person to be able to do this type of work ... My sister, an Occupational Therapist, had to do Anatomy in University. She would come home smelling of formaldehyde & just that would nearly make me puke. Nup... definitely not a job for me...I'm more into nursing people back to health!!! Great story Otin...you story guru you!!

Julie Schuler said...

Oho! You tricked me! Nice work.

Beth said...

I thought he was going to end up being her surgeon. Nice ending and not predictable. As usual. :)

Pat said...

Ha! Clever. Very, very clever. Reminds me of my biology class days! Although I never puked! Just made my male lab partner cut up the frog! LOL!

Jaime said...

i thought he was going to kill her. you always keep your readers guessing.

Stacy (the Random Cool Chick) said...

I was hoping he was a Medical Examiner doing an autopsy! *whew!!* So glad that was the case...still chilling, though! :)

Gladys said...

Good one Dexter, um, I mean Otin

AmyLK said...

Very good ending. I didn't even think of that. Good story!